The Walkup for Friday Fictioneers

It’s Time for Friday FIctioneers Rochelle’s September 4 2015  prompt! The task is to write a story: beginning, middle, and end, in 100 words or less. Contributors from all over the world join in each week. One photo prompt, 100 writers, 100, words, 100 different stories. Join us!

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You’ll find my contribution below this week’s photo prompt; Critiques welcome!

Genre: Realistic Fiction  Word Count: 99

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photo prompt Rochelle

THE Walk-up

The grimy windows. Babies crying. No lift. All the legitimate complaints her mother rattled off. She didn’t care. It was done. All hers. Her first flat. Where she could dream of Life, of Love. A future. Stifling heat from summers solstice meant screen less, airless apartment windows were always open. The night creatures flitted from floor to floor. Aromas, some good and fabulous. Some not so, wafting up stairs. Conversations. Stories. She loved her new Life. She loved her new digs. The Walk Up she called it, fondly. The place where she would make a new go of it.

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Shandra White Harris

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16 comments

  1. It’s never the best, but nothing can beat that first apartment and the sense of pride, ownership and accomplishment that comes with it. Mine was a basement studio and I slept in a sleeping bag and had 1 pot, 1 fork and 1 spoon, and I was thrilled!

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  2. Quite the flooding of the senses, offsetting negative connotations with an unconditioned elation.

    May I ask about the ending though? I’m just curious as to whether it is necessary for readers to consider why the protagonist is making a “new go of it.” It’s noted to be “her first flat,” but including “new” in the conclusive phrase threatens to inject questions about the character’s history that may deprive attention from the rich sensorial elements. Actually, if it is an indication of abandoning a previous life altogether instead of moving out of her parents’ home, you may benefit from emphasizing/embellishing the newness of everything throughout.

    Sorry to prattle, just something to consider.

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  3. I love the positive attitude of the MC. She could be a young person moving away from home, or someone after a breakup or divorce, moving out on her own. And it brings back fond and funny memories for me, too. 🙂

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